Oh my! What an excellent metaphor this picture has become.
"In the hurt eaten framework".... what an excellent line to drop in there near the end. You set that up very nicely in few words and short lines :)
..the hurt-eaten frameworkthat was oncesolid love... wow - like this!
Poor heart to be so hurt and bleeding. Great representation of the artwork
This could be a song. And I would smile to it, drinking and diving in the melody.
oh snap...yeah i can feel that...puncture wounds...mine are tingling now...
The title alone captures a great angle on the pic. This was tight and can be left as is in my humble opinion.
Wow! Excellent metaphor, and "the hurt-eaten framework that once was solid love" is quote-worthy! Fine writing!
A stinging metaphor to transform the house into - short, potent descriptions lead to hard-hitting visuals of a broken heart. House of Blues indeed - and one in which we've all dwelt at one point or another.
"Hurt eaten framework." I like that a lot.
nice now you took this to a relationship that once was whole....love the symbolism...bkm
i agree with the rest..."hurt eaten framework that once was solid love" great lines :)